WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 5:03pm for Chapter the First

Harry has no idea how deep the lake is he was just plunged unwittingly into.

Kokopelli replied:

True, but he's good at treading water.

sylvelle posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 2:13pm for Chapter the First

Excellent return as far as I am concered. Of course what do I know, except what I like.

Sounds interesting, lookinjg forward to more.

Tricia

HopelessFan posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 1:30pm for Chapter the First

Welcome back!

You are one of the authors that started me off on HP fanfiction, and its awesome to see that not only have you written something, but its still as great as I remember. Looking forward!

diagonalpumpkin posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 1:23pm for Chapter the First

Great way to start the story. I'll admit that inheritance stories sometimes worry me, but the amount of thought and explanation that you have put into this has me really looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for the good piece, I can't wait for the next one.

tcl7189 posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 1:23pm for Chapter the First

Nice start!!!

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 12:52pm for Chapter the First

Oh, this is going to get interesting and I suspect Dpahne is going to feel quite relieved and happy about how matters have progressed. OTOH, Ron, being Ron, will undoubtedly rail against Harry becoming involved with the "slimy Slytherin" or some such; it should make for much acrimony and likely will distance him from Harry. Meanwhile, the reactions of Ginevra and Molly Weasley should be quite entertaining and instructive.

Kokopelli replied:

Molly's doped to the gills with potions, having just lost two children and numerous friends.

Ginny's dead, so she's not going to be reacting much.

OSF posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 11:59am for Chapter the First

I like it, thanks for writing. But wouldn't Molly have inherited from Bella since she killed her?

Kokopelli replied:

Good question!  

 

Go back and read the introduction - magic is intent, and sometimes ritual.  Harry picked up Riddle's wand with the intent to keep it permanently because he'd vanquished his foe.  

 

Harry picked up Malfoy's wand, but intended to return it when the emergency was over.  Molly vanquished Bellatrix, but didn't do the ritual with the requisite intent.

lwj2 posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 11:54am for Chapter the First

Good to see you're writing agan, I've always enjoyed your stories.

This has lots of potential, I'm looking forward to reading it, when you put up more. Daphne as a determined, average-looking girl is certainly a different take. Ron as an impecunious version of Draco is, for me, a given; thanks for not pairing him with Hermione.

Thanks for writing and sharing your story.

hpfanscs posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 10:55am for Chapter the First

I really enjoyed the part where Harry defeats Tom Riddle. Very well done.

Kokopelli replied:

That was straight out of Deathly Hallows, with a few edits to fit my story arc.

Micky0077 posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 10:28am for Chapter the First

'Twas a very nice beginning. Looking forward to seeing how this all plays out.

zonianx posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 9:03am for Chapter the First

Always open to a new Daphne and Harry story, if that is where this is heading. This started well and my guess as to Queenie was wrong. I, also, don't see an antaganist clew yet as he seems to be okay with the Weasleys, the Malfoys, the Goblins, and the Ministry. I am glad to see that you are writing again and look forward to this story.

Banner posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 7:46am for Chapter the First

This is interesting and different. I missed you while you are gone - this story brings up all kinds of hopes....

Patches posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 5:20am for Chapter the First

This is really different. I'm suprised that Daphne is Queenie. That is going to take some time for Harry to accept. I look forward to how you work this all out. Thanks for writing. p

gadriam posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 4:06am for Chapter the First

Most interesting. Further, it's a hell of a lot more plausible than most stories i've read lately. The negotiations in the beginning were brilliant, and you have the pieces in place for an interesting tale.

I also loved your note. Fanon is a funny thing. I'm currently writing a story myself, and i found there's a remarkable amount of things i "know" about the world that Rowling didn't write. Hermiones parents are called Dan and Emma more often than not, after Radcliffe and Watson of course. They tend to live in Basingstoke. Susan Bones is rather pretty and busty, and Daphne is supposed to be a supermodel. Icy though? No one under 35 can be icy. The closest they ever get is having a shitty demeanor. It takes more maturity and experience than that. Davis is, as far as i know, not even named in the books. Greengrass is mentioned in Ootp in passing, Davis is not. That makes them completely malleable for any aspiring keyhammerer to shape as they please. Most people just prefer not to.

Anyway, thanks, and I'm looking forward to the next..

g

Wolfric posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 3:14am for Chapter the First

I am very glad to hear from you again. I enjoyed what you have written thus far and look forward to future installments. Thanks for writing. W.

Riegert8 posted a comment on Friday 17th October 2014 10:41pm for Chapter the First

I not surprise that Ginny died, in some ways I expect to be removed from Harry life and death is the fast way.

corrigan posted a comment on Friday 17th October 2014 10:01pm for Chapter the First

Ok I'll tell you I suck at these but I think this story is fantastic it's so unique in view I can't wait to read more it's going to be intresting to see where you go with this

Ken Warner posted a comment on Friday 17th October 2014 9:49pm for Chapter the First

A very enjoyble beginning for what is already better than canon. I am looking forward to seeing how Harry, and hopefilly his teamof advisors handle the multi-layered plans the greengrass clan has to have laid.

now if only we can get Hermione of the stupid potions that she has to be under to want Ron you will have a perfect story.

thanks for sharing

Kokopelli replied:

Hermione's not on potions of any sort (that I know of) and you'll see what happens with Ron in the next chapter.

Iarann posted a comment on Friday 17th October 2014 9:30pm for Chapter the First

Glad to see you back in harness! Very engaging story start, I look forward to seeing where you take this.

BJH posted a comment on Friday 17th October 2014 9:08pm for Chapter the First

All too true how good fanon becomes adopted as near-canon, but I do seem to recall that Sue Bones is described as a strawberry blonde somewhere in canon... But my big question is how did Ron and Hermione wind up in Germaney??? I thought they were going to Australia? "The goddam Germans got nothing to do with this!" ;)

BJH

Kokopelli replied:

I'll look out for the Germanes - they're the ones that arrive on time and smell like sauerkraut after lunch, right?