Lara Quinn posted a comment on Saturday 15th June 2019 12:41pm for Chapter the Third

Great story. Well developed plot with gradual revelation of what was going on. I enjoyed the Millicent in this story.

Jimbocous posted a comment on Tuesday 12th February 2019 3:56pm for Chapter the Third

Thanks! Enjoyed this, nicely done.

Wanderer posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 12:44am for Chapter the Third

I appreciate the heads up on the... companion (not sequel?).

You put a lot of character revelations into a few words, and that's a good thing. I look forward to more of these characters. M

Gary the Grouch posted a comment on Saturday 11th February 2017 2:42pm for Chapter the Third

Interesting story: it's definitely not what it seems to be on the surface.

Despite the best efforts of the characters in the story, it is mostly a happy ending . . . except for a couple of characters whose opinion does not matter.

Well-written and enjoyable!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Tuesday 8th March 2016 8:12pm for Chapter the Third

Fun story and a good read. Interesting story concept and one I've not read before. Thanks for sharing!

tcl7189 posted a comment on Saturday 18th October 2014 2:21pm for Chapter the Third

Too Kool !!!

Nytefyre posted a comment on Monday 25th February 2013 8:15am for Chapter the Third

Interesting.. if it wasn't for the author's note, I wouldn't have picked up on it quite as quickly - probably not until closer to the end. Nice juxtaposition of the dream world with the action of the real world. Off to read the companion.

Thanks for posting.

KirijamaScion posted a comment on Saturday 8th May 2010 3:50am for Chapter the Third

awww come on... where's the follow up... need to know what happened.

GryffindorDragon posted a comment on Thursday 5th March 2009 3:51am for Chapter the Third

Very nice story. Not exactly a pairing I'd like to see. But you provide a nice story line with some interesting twists.

Kokopelli replied:

The point was established in the first chapter - nothing is as it seems - an impossible situation (like cold fusion) yet you get sucked into the illusion.  

Or at least, that was what I was aiming at.

Aelita posted a comment on Wednesday 30th January 2008 10:00am for Chapter the Third

This was very interesting thank you for the great story.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for reading.

Anaknisatanas posted a comment on Friday 27th July 2007 12:03pm for Chapter the Third

I really enjoyed this piece. So many times I feel that Millicent is overlooked. I really enjoyed how you portrayed her.

Deborahsu posted a comment on Saturday 14th July 2007 11:56am for Chapter the Third

VERY well done. I was able to follow what was real & what wasn't pretty easily once the Dreamweaver woke up following the first dream. I did NOT guess that it was Millicent, though!

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 10th July 2007 8:21pm for Chapter the Third

Nice work. If you'd drawn it out a little more
you could have really built up the tension!

Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Sunday 1st July 2007 8:17am for Chapter the Third

Great story! I really enjoyed it, and would love to learn what happens the next day...

But your original fiction should come first. You're too good a writer to spend your talents only on fanfics with no appreciation other than reviews...Wish I was half the world-builder you are, John.

Wolfric posted a comment on Wednesday 27th June 2007 8:10am for Chapter the Third

Thanks for the story, I enjoyed it. I hope you will be moved to entertain us again but in any event thank you for all you have done in that regard. Your stories have always had inventive plot devices and a nice realism about the characters. I appreciate those qualities. W.

brad posted a comment on Saturday 23rd June 2007 2:59pm for Chapter the Third

Very enjoyable story, and an excellent entry in the FFA Authors' "Harry/Millicent bake off"!

At the end of the first chapter I thought that Harry's growing feelings for Millicent would transcend the dream and transfer to the real world once he woke up. But then mid-way through the third chapter you had me quite worried as you put Harry back through his memory of his last conversation with Ginny. Once he was brought back and discovered she was ALIVE ... well, to him, it would be a chance to 'put right' what he thought was a piece of immutable history.

Suffice it to say (I'm getting more anti-canon!Ginny by the minute as we approach DH-day) I'm pleased that it appears that he's sticking by his guns. :-)

In fairness, though, regarding Ginny ... I think it would be very easy to amplify her 'feisty, in-your-face boldness' such as what I thought you'd done here with that conversation, making her too selfish and single-minded for our Boy Who Lived. However, then I re-read Ron's comment about how she was simply 'brassed off' ... which is fair enough ... so I find I can't put her in the 'too nasty for Harry' basket for this story after all (damn!). Still, it does seem that Harry is inclined to persevere with 'Millie' as of the conclusion.

Liked the password to Harry's storm shield (and the concept of the shield itself).

Interesting that you kept Snape as grey, ambivalent, indeterminate as to whether he is a good guy or not. It'll all be easier in about twenty days, won't it? :-)

The end of the second chapter, leading into the third, was the most exciting part of the story, of course; I enjoyed the conversation between Millicent and 'the swot' (!). Typical of Hermione to try to learn Legilimency, although I guess she trained with Harry, since he now appears to be an expert in that art. Loud cheers to Bulstrode for sussing out that Hermione, too, might 'fancy' Harry. Although she seems quite happy with Ron :-(.

Did the employment of 'elemental iron' come from jbern's recent update to his 'To Fight the Coming Darkness'?

Enjoyable story. I'll happily read Cold Fusion, of course, but ... in all your idle time while you're waiting for DH ... I don't suppose you'd care to write a quick sequel to 'Making Change'? Harry and Hermione's first date, a conversation where they learn more about each other, where he pushes past the 'best friend' blinders? Oh well, it was worth asking! :-) Good luck on Fusion and your original fiction while we wait for DH

Patches posted a comment on Friday 22nd June 2007 6:23pm for Chapter the Third

A very interesting story. Very well done. I wasn't sure what was going on for a little bit. I look forward to more of this story if you are planning to continue. Thanks for writing. pms

TheHard posted a comment on Friday 22nd June 2007 1:13pm for Chapter the Third

Wow! Nice Turn out of events! i really liked it :)

JBern posted a comment on Friday 22nd June 2007 4:12am for Chapter the Third

As always thought provoking reminding us that a story does not have to have an actual clear cut ending to be a gripping tale.~Jim

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 21st June 2007 2:10pm for Chapter the Third

*chuckle* I wonder if Harry will be able to work things out with Ginny? If not, I can see that the dreams and her actions definitely changed his opinions of Millicent Bulstrode. It would be interesting to see a sequel exploring where he goes from here.