Nytefyre posted a comment on Sunday 24th February 2013 2:12am

What do you mean no chocolate sauce was harmed? I fully expect my fanfic to be better road tested than that!! ;)

Enjoyed the story with the nice progression of the relationship, even though it started from a very dark place. It was nice to see some improvements as time progressed - and it progressed very quickly.

Thanks for posting!

Riegert8 posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2011 4:20pm

I was surprise that Harry end up working with the Superintendent, you made her so easy person to dislike.

Superintendent seem OK that some of her Aurors committed Sexual assaults, they suppose to uphold the law not to break it. Oh sure some of them could be by mistake, but it no mistake when use a spell to peep on someone when then change. Or when you grab her bum and put you hand in her blouse, In my opinion an couple of Aurors deserve to get fired and charge with a crime for Sexual assault

perspicacity posted a comment on Sunday 26th July 2009 11:12am

I understand you're in retirement and may not read reviews quite as avidly as you may have before, but I wanted to mention that I find this story to be the best Harry/Gabrielle tale I've read, better writing than Tim's (which are the gold standard of this pairing). I've a short list of stories that I keep that I feel taught me something important about writing. Yours is on the list.

I enjoyed the spartan style and if you opt to continue writing, I encourage you to stick with it. The brisk pace kept things moving and let you deal with some pretty heavy emotions without the story becoming annoying. In particular, you did an outstanding job with Harry's depression and overall emotional state. This is a case where trimming was definitely the right decision.

Thanks so much for sharing this piece.

Kokopelli replied:

Retired is not dead...

Lost and Found is a favorite of mine as well - writing post-Hogwarts, non-canon pairing stories was, in a way, quite liberating.   Jeconais did his total mix-up of canon pairings in his trilogy that started off with no pairing, then H-G, then H-Samantha.   This trilogy probably contributed in some small way to this one - Hermione and Neville, yeah, I could see that.  

Ron & one of the Patils?   Talk about a blank slate...


When I wrote TLOS, I was trying to write big - big chapters, big story arcs.   After TLOS, I shifted direction and tried to write using a more compressed style.   The depression bit is a bit of biography - I had a three year spell of depression (untreated) which I finally resolved with Welbutrin and the good advice of my wife, so I'm writing a bit of what I know there.

Thanks for reading.

GryffindorDragon posted a comment on Wednesday 4th March 2009 5:16am

Very cute and heart-warming (well mostly, apart from all the deaths). But I hope you don't mind if I say that I find the ending a bit set-up, a little too cutsy. But don't mind that observation. This is well-written and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

csktech posted a comment on Monday 10th November 2008 2:14am

The scenes with Harry, Luna and Ginny is one of the most heartrendering I have ever read. I envy you your talent, but I will enjoy it every chance I get.

Thanks
Kyle

pfeil posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 1:23pm

Harry needs to get a clue. He's had Hermione and Gabrielle alone in a tent and done nothing :|

:P

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 8:42am

Good chapter.

gunny

Jabe Washburn1 posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 4:35am

I enjoyed that. I never know whether to be disappointed when short fics end, or just to smile and accept that it was intended to leave me wanting more... though, I guess there is more to this one, sort of.

Jabe Washburn1 posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 10:34am

Good stuff. Can't wait to see how it ends.

I especially loved the conversation between Ron and Harry. Any scence that can make me laugh out loud is a winner in my book - mind you, I laugh out lout a lot, but then, I read a lot, too.

Jabe Washburn1 posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 8:46am

Great start. And I'm not just saying that because you're reviewing my work at this time. As I told you in an email, I hadn't read any of your work so far. This seemed like a good place (and a good time) to start.

I look forward to the rest of it... which I'm going to read right now.

Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Wednesday 14th February 2007 6:08am

Loved it! The update has been sitting in my in-box for months and months, and I'm finally getting to it...still have 216 backlogged updates, so don't be offended. You know I love your stuff!

the_goblets posted a comment on Tuesday 9th January 2007 3:30pm

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Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 9:08am

Just what I expect in a Kokpelli:

- tight story line
- excellent dialogue
- unique perspectives
- nicely tied together bits and pieces

A good times was had by all!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 8:44am

The depression makes sense. I've never read that anywhere else.

Harry being 'raised by wolves' also rings true as an anology.

I like Gabrielle's dedication to doing the right thing.

Excellent work!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 8:27am

The 'visit' with Ginny did to me just what you thought it might.

We do get wrapped up in our heroes and heroines, don't we?

Compelling start.

noylj posted a comment on Thursday 24th August 2006 1:13pm

Now, how about going back and writing the rest of the story. This is just a small taste of what the reader should be getting.

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Thursday 10th August 2006 11:29am

I am loved this story. I am also very interested in anything you care to share regarding the above mentioned anit depressant. I am currently sufferring from said condition and wonder what the effects... not the clinical ones, but how the meds make you feel.

If you would email me, I would appreciate it!
usa.jeanette@gmail.com

Manatheron posted a comment on Tuesday 8th August 2006 3:43pm

{Snicker}

Love the ending, It'd have been a little more funny if she had taken a random shot over her shoulder as a warning before she knew who it was, but that would have probably ruined the moment.

:)

Excellent work! I can't wait for the next one!

cmzanna posted a comment on Monday 7th August 2006 7:46am

John, like all your stories I finished this with a grin and a plaintive wish for more :) thanks for the fun read and a very believable premise.

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 6th August 2006 11:11pm

> No chocolate sauce was harmed in the writing of this story.

How . . . unfortunate. Though if it was, you may lose your NSNS status.

Fun little story, Kokopelli. Showing Gabrielle as a young, yet strong and competent professional was a nice touch. Her problems with the male co-workers sounds very reasonable under the circumstances.

Thanks for sharing.