Lost and Found - 2nd Cycle
Picking up the pieces
By kokopelli
Reviews
Jabe Washburn1 posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 4:58am for Picking up the pieces
I like the Harry/Gabrielle story. I'm glad she won out. I look forward to the rest of it...
Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Wednesday 14th February 2007 3:42pm for Picking up the pieces
I love what you've done with the 'matching' idea and how they face it all. And now we are going to get to see them kick some slimy kidnapper butt! (Yeah, living in Mexico means kidnapping is a real problem. Human trafficking, drug fights, and just plain extortion of $$$. Not cool.)
Viridian posted a comment on Monday 23rd October 2006 5:04am for Picking up the pieces
It's always good when the characters overpower the author - it makes for good tales!
And this is shaping up nicely!
noylj posted a comment on Saturday 21st October 2006 7:47am for Picking up the pieces
This is almost as bad as "Hope." Things happen too fast and I, as the reader, want the story to last...I feel that you have a 3 chapter story in mind and I have a desire for a 30-40 chapter story.
Graup posted a comment on Wednesday 30th August 2006 1:44pm for Picking up the pieces
Enjoyed this piece, and the translation of all the Veela tendencies, et al.
I haven't seen that written anywhere, and yours was quite believable.
Thanks for sharing it.
noylj posted a comment on Friday 25th August 2006 11:21am for Picking up the pieces
Thank you for continuing the story. And just think, I just asked you to do so yesterday. Now, we need chocolate sauce and some real fluff along with our bad guy search. Are there any Malfoys left to kill? Killing a Malfoy is always a good thing.
CootiePatootie posted a comment on Thursday 24th August 2006 2:28pm for Picking up the pieces
You know I cannot resist a Kokopelli update. I must admit I am glad Gabby forced you to tell more; I like this story-line. I feel your pain as you probably look at this one as a "you were SUPPOSED to be a one-shot" type of thing. What can you say? The story demands to be told!
I look forward to more of this; chocolate sauce or no. But chocolate sauce is good...
Cheers,
Cassie
cardinalman posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd August 2006 12:10pm for Picking up the pieces
I have enjoyed your work since I first found the Letters of Summer on Phoenixsong last year. The dialogue is very good and lends more depth to the characters than many fanfics I encounter. I look forward to more development of this story.
Mayjest posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd August 2006 8:00am for Picking up the pieces
Absolute genius. I loved the original trilogy, and this is great as well. The way that you never tell the back story, yet by paying attention we can discern enough to understand is great. Hope for more.
My only quibble is with the idea that Harry and Gabrielle were 'matched'. The idea of a bond or something similar between Harry and a veela, is to be honest, a bit cliche, and I don't like the fact that had Ginny survived, both would have been unhappy. Or just Gabrielle, I'm still not sure about that section. Why is it that in fanfiction, bonds like this have to be inevitable?
Kokopelli replied:
Don't get me started on cliches. All plot elements have been used before, somewhere, some time. Shakespeare never wrote an original story in his life.
Now, as to the match - it goes one way. Harry is Gabrielle's match, but had Ginny survived, Harry and Ginny would have married. Gabrielle would have had to content herself with a less than optimal mate. Gabrielle spells all of this out in her "red-haired children" scene.
So it wasn't inevitable.
This story is about, among other things, second chances.
J
Prince Charon posted a comment on Tuesday 22nd August 2006 8:25am for Picking up the pieces
Very interesting.
Thank you for the update.
More soon, please.
saugart posted a comment on Tuesday 22nd August 2006 2:05am for Picking up the pieces
Oh my goodness. There are some good stories here. I enjoyed your well-thought-out details on the Lives of the Veela. That's quite an exciting little ending, and rather horrifying at that. You've sure got my interest up.
I enjoyed reading the excerpt from Ruth.
A minor nit: I was surprised to hear that the narrator described it as having "clicks."
According to Wikipedia, the Basque sound system doesn't include clicks.
Kokopelli replied:
We are talking about Veela here - when you have a beak, you pronounce things a bit differently.
J
Tiffls posted a comment on Monday 21st August 2006 9:45am for Picking up the pieces
This is a good read so far! Thanks for writing!
brad posted a comment on Sunday 20th August 2006 10:51pm for Picking up the pieces
You really like your Veela, don't you? Please don't forget the final battle and Ever After!!! :-)
Poor old Harry, another story where he's been backed into a corner by Gabrielle. "You know I can't do that" he says. Okay, I'm convinced it's because he loves her, but even if he didn't he'd be in a bind.
Rescuing three more young Veela girls? I can't help but consider that Harry's where he is now, with Gabrielle, because of his rescue of a pre-adolescent Veela girl.
Kokopelli replied:
Yeah, well, he does have a people rescuing thing, doesn't he?
Donald McLeod posted a comment on Sunday 20th August 2006 6:26pm for Picking up the pieces
I like the way you played this chapter and lead to the next.
Manatheron posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 12:22pm for Picking up the pieces
:)
May the baptism in fire be for the asshole who would kidnap three girls to use as hostages. My his baptism be brief and very VERY painful.
Keep up the excellent work!
Ginger posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 7:36am for Picking up the pieces
More please
Patches posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 4:59am for Picking up the pieces
This is a good chapter. I'm glad you aren't through with this story line. I look forward to more on this one. Thanks for writing. pms
UdderPD posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 3:55am for Picking up the pieces
Excellent.
I read the first few hundred words of this this morning and realised that I had not read TL&FT. However it did not stop me from reading to the end of this chapter.
I have now read all of the available story and as stated above it is Excellent.
TTFN UdderPD
Sonicdale posted a comment on Friday 18th August 2006 11:21pm for Picking up the pieces
Just when I thought that this story had gone as far as it could go, you take it up another notch.
Bam!
Good work. I especially like that Harry's not All-Knowing and such. But I hope you get to give him moments to shine. I mean, he's not the 'special hit wizard from Paris' for nothing. :)
I always liked seeing Harry kick ass. Hopefully you'll give us some here.
... with a side helping of Veela taming/mating/something. I like the Veela expansion idea. Makes Gabby and Fleur more personable.
Good work.
Riegert8 posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2011 5:43pm for Picking up the pieces