GryffindorDragon posted a comment on Wednesday 4th March 2009 8:19am for The Good Shepherd

Fuso betrayal solved a number of weaknesses in the storyline (there were a number of things I would've commented on before that point :) ) -- Bravo!. The demise of Unai was brilliant.

Sonicdale posted a comment on Thursday 26th October 2006 5:02am for The Good Shepherd

Wow.
Nice.
I liked the bit that Harry's not Super!Harry and just as vulnerable to mistakes as the next guy.

Gabby's attitude of pouncing on Harry is gonna bite her. I like the setup here. :)

Hope Harry is up to the challenge of being a mate. This story rocks.
Good work.

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 21st October 2006 11:18am for The Good Shepherd

another 12 or 25 chapters would be great...

Darkness posted a comment on Wednesday 18th October 2006 5:19am for The Good Shepherd

Its nice to see that Harry is not God, even after having defeated Voldie and can make lapses of judgement such as letting his guard down and getting injured.

I thought Matzalen had done something similar to Unai, but nothing that brutal. The bastard deserves and then some.

Awesome chapter! Cant wait for the next one!

Terry Swain posted a comment on Monday 9th October 2006 2:39pm for The Good Shepherd

Great chapter. :)

Amamama posted a comment on Sunday 8th October 2006 7:12am for The Good Shepherd

Ahhh... What a treat. I've mow enjoyed this wonderful piece of writing over several days, digesting it in, maybe 300 word portions? Don't know, as I have no idea how many words you ended up with, but I don't really mind. Starting the whole journey out of the Chateau d'If with Matzalen's pov was great. I doubt any girl in her position would like to live, and the way she finally killed Unai was just perfect. Boiling his brains served him right. I just hope she won't end up in a huge mental struggle because of it, he's really not worth it. I wonder what the complications might be with the Basque, was Unai a Basque, perhaps?

Gabrielle's worries about not measuring up to Ginny's standard is just too sweet. The pain of having an older and more experienced boyfriend, just that Harry isn't any more experienced than her in the physical aspects of love. He's so sweet, and I wonder if you're able to make his view of pre-marital sex rub off on the teens of today - if there are any who reads this. Have you ever done a survey to find out the age of your readers?

I like the way Gabrielle's and Harry's magic seems to blend, how they're rubbing off of each other. Quite practical too, when it made Gabrielle able to save Harry's life. You almost gave me a heart attack right there. Harry trying to track her to find her on the beach is just so sweet - as is his admittance that he would enjoy the view from below when climbing the cliff. Their banter is incredibly sweet "Your pervert, never forget that" - it's a wonderful touch.

I seriously doubt I've mentioned everything worth mentioning, but one thing's for sure - I seriously look forward to the next chapter. The look on the District Superintendent's face when they arrive as one must be worth the wait alone. Because they do make it, don't they???

Thanks for sharing, I loved it!

Berte

MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Saturday 7th October 2006 1:08pm for The Good Shepherd

Great chapter, Update soon. You could have the adventures of Harry and Gabby, they make a great team.

MPF

takon65 posted a comment on Saturday 7th October 2006 9:41am for The Good Shepherd

I've been hiding in the shadows for too long and should have left a note long ago.

You have the ability to paint pictures in my mind showing places that I probably never will see. To me this is a sign of a very good author.

Reading most of your chapters I feel like David Copperfield; "Please Sir, May I have some more?"

I can't wait to see more of your works in this story and others,

Sam

Jenni posted a comment on Saturday 7th October 2006 9:21am for The Good Shepherd

I've been lurking for far too long without leaving a review. How do you say I love what you do and please keep doing it without sounding like everyone else or a daranged fangirl? I enjoy the journey you take your faithful readers on. Well written, creative paths and with a stong moral backbone... it makes for a fabulous read.

I love what you do and please keep doing it.

Jenni

Sean Dillon posted a comment on Saturday 7th October 2006 1:43am for The Good Shepherd

Why not do a couple more point-to-point apparitions under the ward and finish dropping the anchors? That seems a bit incomplete and I don't like the idea of just leaving the explosives lying around on the ground.

Kokopelli replied:

Harry's wounded and still whistling as he breathes on a collapsed lung.   The island is crawling with bent Aurors and Unai's goons.   Sounds like a good time to get out of Dodge City to me, but then, I'm just a liberal arts graduate of a Land Grant University.

The Resident posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 5:49pm for The Good Shepherd

Thank you for another excellent chapter. You maintained the suspense perfectly. Keep up the excellent work. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 4:19pm for The Good Shepherd

*chuckle* I love those lines just before they climb the cliff, those are a delightful bit of comedy. Of course, now that you've set things up, you know we're all going to be looking forward to the next scene where they all appear in teh District Superintendent's office.

Bravo!

seeker77 posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 3:07pm for The Good Shepherd

very nice. I really enjoy your writing. (TLOS,SFSY) are the best but this one is closing in

HermioneGreen posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 2:55pm for The Good Shepherd

A wonderful addition to an equally wonderful story. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for sharing

'Mione

Manatheron posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 2:00pm for The Good Shepherd

You know, it's kind of evil to leave me like that... US, I meant US!

Kokopelli replied:

Singing deliberately off key - "You picked a fine time to leave me, Lucielle...."

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 5:57am for The Good Shepherd

Apparently Certain Parties aren't too happy that Harry served Riddle Tartare a couple of years back. A Hit-Wizard with a bounty on his head isn't exactly surprising (Moody), but the number of folks that are stupid enough to try and collect it alone beggars belief.
The girls are saved, and Harry decides that *yes*, he's marrying Gabrielle.

Eric2 posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2006 4:07am for The Good Shepherd

As always, a Great story!

I'm curious as to what happens when Ginny, Harry, and Gabrielle all meet in the after-life, though. ;-)

Kokopelli replied:

I'm not a Mormon, so I don't believe in eternal marriage - as far as I can tell, in Heaven we are neither married, nor given in marriage, per the Gospel account.

KateHC posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 9:58pm for The Good Shepherd

Oh! Thank you for this chapter. It is almost Happy Ending Time.

Asad posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 9:29pm for The Good Shepherd

Another enjoyable chapter.. can't wait for the chocolate... ;)

ichtys posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 8:53pm for The Good Shepherd

I like this story. Thanks for sharing.