Lost and Found - 2nd Cycle
The Good Shepherd
By kokopelli
Reviews
Jim_xinu posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 4:32pm for The Good Shepherd
Great chapter, lots of action. :-) Thanks for sharing it with us.
CootiePatootie posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 4:04pm for The Good Shepherd
At first, I could not figure out why Harry didn't recognize her, but then I remembered:
Master provided a coarse black wig that made her look like an Egyptian, which Master found amusing, so he darkened her skin to match her hair.
duh for me!
"Well, you see, when a Wizard and a Witch love each other, they get married, and after that. . ."
A classic...so appropriate and very funny
Love the cameo by the Weasley Twin; when they are shown as both intelligent and devious/clever that is my favorite characterisation. They are *not* stupid; immature maybe, but hey - teenagers are immature. When you see them as "Q" then you are seeing their real potential. EXCELLENT!!!
I love how you let Gabby continue to make errors of assumption with Harry and his past. One day she will learn to just ask!
Great update as always. I understood the chapter title and found it quite appropriate. I like the little twins as seers. The name for Harry still surprises and pleases me (Companion of the Dawn) for some reason. :-)
Ta,
Cassie
Kokopelli replied:
Mistakes happen.
The dynamic of assuming things is going to be something to work out between Gabrielle and Harry - both feel like they've known each other forever, but they really need to get to know each other better - which in part is why Harry's been dragging his feet.
J
Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 3:39pm for The Good Shepherd
Terrific Chapter, John. Fuso was unexpected. I thought him just as you presented him, an arrogant bastard. Thank you for not presenting just the obvious. The fire wall idea is interesting. I look forward to seeing what happens to Fuso and whether Harry and Gabrielle have to be around to execute his punishment.
What will happen to the Twins and their sister? I forget if they have any relatives. Is this setting up for Harry and Gabrielle taking care of them?
I look forward to the continuation, and at this rate the completion, of this story. Thank you for writing it and sharing with us.
Mike (MoA)
Kokopelli replied:
The Artzai sisters will soon be orphans. As to the rest of your questions - wait and see.
DJ posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 3:17pm for The Good Shepherd
Nice update good fight. Can't wait to see what is next.
Crys posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 3:08pm for The Good Shepherd
> As much as I’d like things to get out of hand here and now,
Such a way with words that girl has.
Personally, I think your Harry is showing nearly unbelievable amounts of self-restraint. I understand it for the story and rating purposes, but . . . Anyway, that's the only part that I'm having even a little trouble swallowing.
> Matzalen conjured a fireball between her hands — when Unai’s head was wedged between them.
*wince* Yeouch.
You made it pretty clear what that poor girl had been living through (expected, given who her captors are and that she's Veela), but kept it from being graphic.
Good story. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Kokopelli replied:
Yeah, well, write what you know.
I didn't kiss my wife until after we were engaged.
We'll see more of Matzalen's baggage in the next chapter.
snuffles007 posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 2:58pm for The Good Shepherd
Excellent chapter! I can't wait for you to finish this one up!
Ken Warner posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 2:46pm for The Good Shepherd
Wonderful way for M to get her revenge - loved the realistic limitations you put on Harry after the mis-adventure. All in all - another stunning example of your ample skill - thank for your gracious sharing of talent.
warmest regards
Kinsfire posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 2:00pm for The Good Shepherd
What I like is that, as I read it, Fuso is on the run now. He won't be able to show up in France without a major problem, especially since it's likely to be a "kill on sight" order.
And either Harry or Gabrielle is likely to make him wish that he'd been killed the same way Unai was.
I feel sorry for Matzalen, though. It will take a long time (if ever) for any semblence of religious feelings to come back for her. The loss of one's faith is not fun, and hurts beyond what anyone can ever say. It must be experienced, and I don't wish that pain on anyone.
Kokopelli replied:
Yeah, Fuso is now in a world of hurt.
Matzalen will be one screwed-up teenager for a long while.
More of each in the next chapter.
Chris1 posted a comment on Thursday 5th October 2006 8:43pm for The Good Shepherd
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