Mayjest posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 10:53pm

When you get bitten you just don't stop churning them out, do you? Another nice chapter. Would have prefered a bit more info on the plot, it seemed this one was more setting up the next chapter than anything else, although I suppose I should have got that from the 'part 1'. I wouldn't mind hearing more of the back story around Trackers and Aurors, it seems there is some bad blood between them, and having Veela powers is enough to make anyone jealous.

Kokopelli replied:

If I were intending to write another 200k word story, I'd choke my readers on backstory, but here I'm going for a more spare style akin to short stories.

Ken Warner posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 9:12pm

extremely powerful chapter - you do such a marvelous job of expressing the emotions bubbling underneath the surface of the characters that I am left stunned.
thanks for re-awakening my sense of wonder
warmest regards

Chris1 posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 7:00pm

Nice story :) The marriage proposal was hilarious :D

Chris

Patches posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 6:50pm

I like this story. Thanks so much for writing it. Romance can never run smooth for Harry so this is a good example. I like the AU idea of Gabrielle. It is sad Ginny had to die for this to happen but it leaves other possiblilities open. I look forward to the next chapter! pms

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 5:02pm

Excellent chapter, once again, John. I like the characterization of Gabriel in this story. There is pretty much nothing in canon to go on, so it leaves so much up to the author, which is often a recipe for disaster in Fanfiction, but you did good.

That head auror on this hunt, Fuso, is just the sort that does fill the ranks of professionals; the person more interested in their own fiefdom rather than what would be best and fastest when time is a concern. It is a shame.

I didn't understand why Harry didn't stay with his fiance, until the last when you mentioned that he had much to do before he could rest, and so he souldn't want to disturb her on coming back.

Thank you for writing.

Mike (MoA)

KateHC posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 4:02pm

Much is yet to happen to our happy couple.

DJ posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 3:20pm

Nice work I am having a lot of fun reading this story of yours.

Crys posted a comment on Tuesday 29th August 2006 2:37pm

> operating a small printing business, wedding announcements and the like
I think I can guess a coming "unofficial thank you" gift. Or will it be a wedding gift?

Nice variation on veela Mated sub-genre. Some of the same rules, but not all of 'em.

> big erotic lump of magic
Now THAT is a unique description! :)

noylj posted a comment on Friday 25th August 2006 11:21am

Thank you for continuing the story. And just think, I just asked you to do so yesterday. Now, we need chocolate sauce and some real fluff along with our bad guy search. Are there any Malfoys left to kill? Killing a Malfoy is always a good thing.

CootiePatootie posted a comment on Thursday 24th August 2006 2:28pm

You know I cannot resist a Kokopelli update. I must admit I am glad Gabby forced you to tell more; I like this story-line. I feel your pain as you probably look at this one as a "you were SUPPOSED to be a one-shot" type of thing. What can you say? The story demands to be told!

I look forward to more of this; chocolate sauce or no. But chocolate sauce is good...

Cheers,

Cassie

cardinalman posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd August 2006 12:10pm

I have enjoyed your work since I first found the Letters of Summer on Phoenixsong last year. The dialogue is very good and lends more depth to the characters than many fanfics I encounter. I look forward to more development of this story.

Mayjest posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd August 2006 8:00am

Absolute genius. I loved the original trilogy, and this is great as well. The way that you never tell the back story, yet by paying attention we can discern enough to understand is great. Hope for more.

My only quibble is with the idea that Harry and Gabrielle were 'matched'. The idea of a bond or something similar between Harry and a veela, is to be honest, a bit cliche, and I don't like the fact that had Ginny survived, both would have been unhappy. Or just Gabrielle, I'm still not sure about that section. Why is it that in fanfiction, bonds like this have to be inevitable?

Kokopelli replied:

Don't get me started on cliches.   All plot elements have been used before, somewhere, some time.   Shakespeare never wrote an original story in his life.

Now, as to the match - it goes one way.   Harry is Gabrielle's match, but had Ginny survived, Harry and Ginny would have married.   Gabrielle would have had to content herself with a less than optimal mate.   Gabrielle spells all of this out in her "red-haired children" scene.

So it wasn't inevitable.

This story is about, among other things, second chances.

J

Prince Charon posted a comment on Tuesday 22nd August 2006 8:25am

Very interesting.

Thank you for the update.

More soon, please.

saugart posted a comment on Tuesday 22nd August 2006 2:05am

Oh my goodness. There are some good stories here. I enjoyed your well-thought-out details on the Lives of the Veela. That's quite an exciting little ending, and rather horrifying at that. You've sure got my interest up.

I enjoyed reading the excerpt from Ruth.

A minor nit: I was surprised to hear that the narrator described it as having "clicks."
According to Wikipedia, the Basque sound system doesn't include clicks.

Kokopelli replied:

We are talking about Veela here - when you have a beak, you pronounce things a bit differently.

J

Tiffls posted a comment on Monday 21st August 2006 9:45am

This is a good read so far! Thanks for writing!

brad posted a comment on Sunday 20th August 2006 10:51pm

You really like your Veela, don't you? Please don't forget the final battle and Ever After!!! :-)

Poor old Harry, another story where he's been backed into a corner by Gabrielle. "You know I can't do that" he says. Okay, I'm convinced it's because he loves her, but even if he didn't he'd be in a bind.

Rescuing three more young Veela girls? I can't help but consider that Harry's where he is now, with Gabrielle, because of his rescue of a pre-adolescent Veela girl.

Kokopelli replied:

Yeah, well, he does have a people rescuing thing, doesn't he?

Donald McLeod posted a comment on Sunday 20th August 2006 6:26pm

I like the way you played this chapter and lead to the next.

Manatheron posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 12:22pm

:)

May the baptism in fire be for the asshole who would kidnap three girls to use as hostages. My his baptism be brief and very VERY painful.

Keep up the excellent work!

Ginger posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 7:36am

More please

Patches posted a comment on Saturday 19th August 2006 4:59am

This is a good chapter. I'm glad you aren't through with this story line. I look forward to more on this one. Thanks for writing. pms