fyrecat posted a comment on Wednesday 18th October 2017 11:21pm

Quite a fun story. Thank you!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 9:42pm

Fun ending to this story. Thanks for sharing!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 9:15pm

Nice bit of slight of hand done for the trail. Thanks for sharing!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 8:09pm

It's great that Remus has formulated a plan to release Sirius. I do have to wonder how they plan to get him a trial if they can't while he is in prison. Thanks for sharing!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 6:44pm

Good chapter with a terrible ending. I'm sure that Harry is rather confused why Moony showed up and then left him again. Thanks for sharing!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 6:14pm

It's wonderful how devious the Goblins can be, lol. Good chapter and thanks for sharing!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 5:14pm

Wow, quite the full days for Remus. Nice save for the Longbottoms. Thanks for sharing!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 1:35pm

Great first chapter and interesting story concept. Thanks for sharing!

bowers.larry@gmail.com posted a comment on Sunday 3rd September 2017 9:36am

Excellent!!! I enjoyed your story and your original characters. Your thoery on werewolf transformation was great. I also enjoyed much of the background such as places and islands and such. I looked up many things and locations. I find that a plus.

Thank you for sharing your time, talents and imagination with us readers.

Kokopelli replied:

Such a thoughtful review - thanks.  Certain things I find hard - like character names.  I try to make the geography and the backgrounds work.  I'd have a hard time creating a 100% new universe, because I'd have to make maps and create histories - too much like work if you ask me.  I'm glad you enjoyed the story - it was fun to write.  Certain things (like Daisy) just tended to take off in a direction all their own.

crystalscan2056 posted a comment on Sunday 13th August 2017 2:39pm

Heck of a good story! Thank you for writing it. I know this site isnt as well trafficked as it once was, and I missed it. Keep it up!

millercommamatt posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd August 2017 2:41pm

It's been a while since I last journeyed into the storied landscape of Kokopelli's mind. I'm glad I did. There's less and less HP fan fiction to read these days and good writing has almost dried up. Thanks for the oasis.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for the kind words.  There's a few bright spots, and then there's the frustratingly incomplete stories.  One reason I try to write shorter pieces these days is so that I can reasonably be sure to finish it before life interferes.

robbspotter posted a comment on Tuesday 1st August 2017 3:26pm

ooohhhh like the probable end, brilliant thanks, up for more if you get inspired thanks

Kokopelli replied:

It's awfully tempting to write some one-shots with Daisy.

 

Ken Warner posted a comment on Monday 31st July 2017 5:53am

Thank you for sharing a delightful story, much improved by the logical thinking of the Marauders instead of the evil of Dumbledore.

Your version of Alice is delightful in her practicality and kindness, the subtle way that you sketched out and colored in the her character is a skillful bit of writing.

Daisy is a pure wonder, Galatea at her very best.

Warmest regards

Kokopelli replied:

One of the big challenges for any fan fic writer in the HP lane is how to portray Dumbledore.  Is he incompetent?  Is he manipulative and evil? JKR definately writes like he's a good guy, but there's a lot of death and destruction in his wake.  Alice is, of course, a blank slate, but I tried to do justice to her character, with Mom winning out in the end.  Daisy?  I had no idea that Daisy would grow as a character when I first wrote her into a scene, but she's a good fit with the story arc, so away she went.

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 30th July 2017 12:44pm

A well written 'nice' story that was an enjoyable read. I'm just sorry to see it finish as it was a pleasant change to all the action and intrigue that gets circulated.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks - if you thought it was nice and enjoyable to read, then I succeeded.

Nemoblank posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 11:25pm

Wait a minute, twin sons? Isn't Neville a brown haired fatass and Harry a black haired starvling? Lets not go too far in this. It would be more intesting to see a composite family trying to get along,

Kokopelli replied:

Go back and read the paragraph again.  She's raising two boys, whose birthdays are a day apart. She's essentially raising them as brothers, which makes them fraternal twins.  This Harry didn't spend 10 years being starved at the Dursleys, he instead spent less than a year with relatives that didn't like him much, so he's not the runt that canon Harry is.

mwinter posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 5:09pm

Cool story. Dumbledore must be ticked that in stead of a short 7 years to kill Voldemort it'll take longer and less people die this way.

Kokopelli replied:

Dumbledore gets out-maneuvered and loses a lot of control, which is probably good for all involved.

Dad posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 3:38pm

Very original. Very enjoyable.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for your kind words.

strandale posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 3:23am

what an amazing journey, thanks for the ride kokopelli. (shipper in me is absolutely DEVASTATED that julia didn't win the remus sweepstakes, though.)

Kokopelli replied:

Oh, puh-leeze, I've had enough static from shippers over the years.  Julia admires Remus, and at one time might have had a teeny-tiny crush on him, but she realizes that Remus is on a different trajectory.

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 6:39pm

Interesting wrap up of the story...a good end without being all JKRappy. The omake is humourous and you know who wears that pants in that family.

Kokopelli replied:

uthamm posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 5:08pm

Compentent Neville before 7th year, interested engaged parents for Harry and a dramatically reduced Dumbledore?

Very nice - this would be a Harry who is a lot more like James . . . learning for fun and interest rather than life and death. I also liked the play to Remus' belief that nobody would want him by having Alice ask!

Thanks for sharing.

Kokopelli replied:

In an earlier chapter I had Julia reacting to Remus's "who would want me" statement, yes, Alice _had_ to initiate things.

As to James and Neville, they're polite and kind, two traits that would never be used to describe Sirius or James, who were really spoiled jerks.