amulder posted a comment on Saturday 10th June 2017 1:25pm

Just read all three... well done. So far!

Really liking the portrayal of the longbottoms as well. Fun to flesh them out in new and interesting ways.

So is the girl a werewolf or an animagus? Are you tweaking the presentation of werewolves in this story? they don't normally have any control over transformations as far as I know.

toddlers are very hard to write... good luck with the next few chapters!

...art

Wolfric posted a comment on Saturday 10th June 2017 3:21am

Fine chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

storiesdr posted a comment on Friday 9th June 2017 7:49am

Just discovered this story. Thank you. Enjoyable couple of hours. Interested to see where you will take this. Looking forward to seeing how you will resolve the Sirius and Harry issues and any actions against the Dursleys.

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 7:18pm

I hope that the Will of Lily and James states whom was the secret keeper, whom was the appointed guardian(s) in case of their demise, and maybe making Remus Steward to House Potter (otherwise Albus will grab that some way). I hope that the Will of Sirius states he was not secret keeper, what to do if he cannot do his Guardian duties to Harry, and makes Remus Steward of House Black. To really make an impact I hope that either of both wills out Albus as the caster of the Fidelus, that he is to have no say in what happens with Harry, and that each of the Dursleys are to have not contact with Harry for any reason; then have Albus' signature on the papers saying he witnessed the delcarations.

I get the feeling that Daisy is going to be lusting over Moony, and Moony will be running like a scared pup. If they recover Harry I doubt Remus would be allowed to keep him, so it is a good thing that Frank and Alice are waiting and just as anxious to get him.

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 5:52pm

An interesting development particularly the new contingent from Wales.

bigd95822 posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 2:16pm

Well your right, it wasn't a great spot to stop. At least it wasn't a cliffy, which are universally loathed by readers and maliciously giggled upon by writers. Nevertheless, your story is interesting, and it's nice to see Remus hasn't crawled into a bottle of alcohol for the next decade. That's a cheap cop-out by uninspired writers, IMHO. The character deserves better, and I think would do better than jk ever gave him the credit for.

I'm looking forward to the next installment.

bigd95822

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks - yes, JKR seems to not think much of Remus, he's compassionate and smart, but by the time we see him in Order of the Phoenix, he's a bit of a loser.

KingDark posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 2:05pm

Why isn't Remus more concerned about the son of his best friend? I mean, I know that he technically doesn't have a reason to think that there is a reason TO worry, but that doesn't mean he shouldn't look for it to reassure himself everything is A o kay.

Kingdark

Kokopelli replied:

Patience, Grasshopper.  You'll see a little bit of Harry in the next chapter.

princessamarante1 posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 1:07pm

Another wonderful chapter. I am really enjoying the chance to get to know Remus better. Thank you for breaking up a long night shift.

Kairan1979 posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 12:22pm

I wonder if Charlie Fletcher is related to Mundungus.

Glad to see Sirius thought of creating a hidden safe. It makes sense; the war can make anybody cautious.

Kokopelli replied:

As best as I can tell, there's no relation.  Fletcher is a trade name - someone who made arrows, like Baker, Brewer, Potter, Chandler - it's possible that they could be related, but not likely.

BJH posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 12:15pm

I want to complain that the story isn't moving fast enough, that it is dragging, but I just can't. It's only been three chapters and you have at least three plots in the works, Harry, Sirius, and the werewolves. It is your expected high quality both technically and plot-wise and I look forward to each update.

Thanks for the story.

BJH

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for your kind words.  I typically like to get several chapters done before I start posting, but I decided to work a little closer to the wire with this story.  I have the outline completed, with various scenes, and have blocked out the final scene, but we've probably got several chapters to go before this short story closes.

Micky0077 posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 11:14am

Happy to see another chapter of this! Lot's of stuff got accomplished and new stuff to be resolved. Still looking forward to seeing how things continue to play out. It's nice to see that the obstacles so far have been logical and not too "I'm just making things harder so there is conflict". It seems like so many stories I read fall into the trap of bogging down the story with all these set-backs and out-right depressing obstructions just so things don't seem "too easy".

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks - I'm not writing a long saga, so I don't have to put unnecessary angst and crud into the works.

stormmaster posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 9:56am

I was quite pleased to discover this new story on this site, seeing as many of the authors are either no longer active or posting elsewhere. All of the stories posted here are a cut above, and this new story, this new chapter, continues that. So far, a slower paced story, perfect for meandering through on a lazy afternoon.

I look forward to seeing how this story winds its way through to its conclusion.

Kokopelli replied:

Most of us on this site got on with our  lives - one author has died, a few have pretty much retired from writing anything, JBern is writing books for pay and serving as a Publisher for some fascinating new authors, and a few have just gone silent.  

germankitty posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 8:41am

I'm absolutely loving this! Capable!Remus is always a delight, and there are not nearly enough stories out there which are not making him into a barely-functional, all-but-destitute doormat.

I especially like that you're writing him as being able to move easily between the mundane and the wizarding world; given his condition, the only workable solution to live above the poverty level. His unquestionable intelligence would surely lead him to the same conclusion, and you managed to give him an occupation that is actually workable. Well done!

Looking forward to the next installment.

Kokopelli replied:

There's all sorts of things that I imagine Remus would be good at, but he can't hold a job in the Magical world, and he can't do the training/education in the mundane world - can you imagine trying to get through a typical Police training program while staying in the closet as a Werewolf?  I had Remus working as a Bounty Hunter in one of my earlier stories - not much of a capital investment necessary, and if you can deliver, most people won't ask questions.

Noble Korhedron posted a comment on Thursday 8th June 2017 8:04am

Hmm, looks like Albus is meddling already, the old BASTARD!! MORE PLEASE!!

Kokopelli replied:

Yes, Albus is a meddling SOB.  No, we're not going to see much of him beyond a cameo appearance.

anonymous5 posted a comment on Wednesday 7th June 2017 4:29pm

It's been a surprisingly tumultuous day at work -- so to finish up and then see a fresh new chapter of your intricate, calming prose is exactly what I needed. Thanks for providing us with more of this yarn!

Kokopelli replied:

Makes it sound like my writing puts you to sleep...

gmanfatman posted a comment on Tuesday 6th June 2017 8:10pm

it is nice that Remus is willing to work with the pack

Kokopelli replied:

Remus, the crypto-capitalist job maker!

Amamama posted a comment on Wednesday 31st May 2017 4:03pm

Ahh, I do love your storybuilding. Loads of interesting information here, I'm looking forward to see how this pans out. And no, I dodn't think this would be a complete rewrite, more that Alice not being tortured into madness gives me hope that both Neville and Harry will grow up feeling safe and nurtured (more so now, with Alice as Harry's godmother). I know your focus is on Remus, and I must say I like what I see.

Richard6154 posted a comment on Wednesday 31st May 2017 7:53am

Nice to see you back here wrtiting. A great start to the story. I always enjoy a good plot with inteligent characters acting reasonably.

Thanks for sharing and looking forward to more. :)

Dave Harris posted a comment on Monday 29th May 2017 5:56am

Interesting start.

I am wondering why Remus would have had to make a whole pot of coffee, though. Back in the eighties it would have been more likely the other way around in my experience - you would make a pot of tea, but a single cup of (instant) coffee.

jacmarie87 posted a comment on Sunday 28th May 2017 5:57pm

Very interesting beginning! It looks like a lot of different things can happen with this idea.