Frank Hacklander posted a comment on Thursday 18th February 2016 11:43pm

god knows you hate this but i think it is the beginning of something remarkable. forget susan (to the degree you can) and focus on Paxton and Amelia. Kudos. Not as remarkable (yet) as the Haphne story (which I also liked very much), but it certainly has possibilites with respect to Paxton and Amelia. And, perhaps, that'as where the focus should be which will get you out of your rut. gods man, your contribution to the matryoshka stuff was great. get away from ginny (that red-headed trollop) and find your calling with Amelia helping a godforsaken ex-drunk. Some real possibilities there....all the best.

Kokopelli replied:

Canon Ron annoys me.  Canon Ginny is a bit of a cipher.  Thanks for your review.

kb0 posted a comment on Thursday 18th February 2016 10:57pm

That has some real potential. I like the "gumshoe" feel you've created. I also like that you've giving Harry "help", something that I think should have been done as it was realistic and JKR refused to because it didn't fit her "martyr" theme. I do see you're addressing that lack of help bit by looking at Molly's role as well as what Dumbles may have done to primary school teachers. Another good thing is that you've got Amelia investigating on the sly; I wondered why she didn't do that in the books (again JKR couldn't afford that logic) and I like your explanation about Fudge shutting her down (which I'd guess JKR probably imagined as well but didn't tell us or I don't remember reading that in the book).

It's really too bad your muse hasn't cooperated with you on this. Perhaps find someone you can bat it around with and see what ideas float to the top? I suppose it's even more interesting to me because I'm finishing a Harry/Susan story, so a different perspective on things has intrigue for me.

Thanks for sharing, Kevin

Kokopelli replied:

To the extent that this story had a point, it was "with just a little help, Harry could have done so much more," which is quite different from BadAssHarry! or BootStrapHarry! that so often gets written in very forgettable stories (except when written by Jaconais, who can turn sow's ears into silk luggage).

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 18th February 2016 10:22pm

A very interesting start and a different approach to events. I'm rather looking forward to seeing how this goes, particularly if Harry's "job" has him away from 4 Privet Drive when the dementors show up (that Paxton would recognize what happened and immediately tell Amelia could skew several events from then on). That last line was a nice touch and I'm looking forward to seeing if they become "just" friends or something more; that latter could cause some interesting reactions, both entertaining and instructive, in a number of other parties.

I will very definitely be looking forward to updates to this one.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks

Matt Harris posted a comment on Thursday 18th February 2016 10:05pm

This was very enjoyable. Sorry your muse was uncooperative. Would be interesting to see the butterfly effects from Harry not being in Little Whinging when the dementors show up.

Kokopelli replied:

Maybe we will.

Nytefyre posted a comment on Sunday 24th February 2013 8:22pm

This whole series had great glimmers and moments in it. Thanks for posting.

readyornot posted a comment on Wednesday 22nd July 2009 2:18pm

I love this story and have read it several times. I was hoping you could direct me to the rest of it (I'm assuming you didn't start with chapter 4). Thanks!

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Thursday 7th May 2009 12:12pm

Damn, but that's cute!

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Thursday 7th May 2009 12:07pm

I like it. Tonks not knowing what her original self looks like was a nice touch.

Stanley Chalk posted a comment on Tuesday 31st March 2009 12:36pm

I like this story. Could you tell me if this story is continued or is this where The Phoenix Reborn ends? To me this story is to good to end here.
Stan

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for writing, Stan.

The vault is where I put odds and ends of stories.

Mr.Intel wanted to do a story with me - The Phoenix Reborn - we had a rough outline, and I wrote a chapter and a half that he was going to work on incorporating into "his" chapters.   Around that time his real life got busy, so he took a rather long hiatus from writing fan fiction - I parked my chapters in the Vault here.

This teaser chapter is from a story that I outlined years ago, set in the TLOS universe - it's called Ever After - Ron marries Hermione, Harry marries Ginny, and then after 20 plus years of marriage, Ron and Ginny die - so Widow Weasley and Widower Potter end up together.

I've always liked to write about second chances, and I wanted to play around with Harry/Hermione, but make the characters believable.

I'll probably never write Ever After, but if the winning bidder from my auction asks for a chapter, I may write a stand alone short story in that story arc, or whatever the winner requests (within reason).

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 18th April 2007 1:00am

Outstanding.

gunny

Heather_Sinclair posted a comment on Tuesday 20th March 2007 1:11pm

Excellent scene, and while it might make the basis for a good story I think it sits well where it is.

And also a good,original,answer for the cliche of Tonks' true form.

KateHC posted a comment on Tuesday 6th March 2007 1:06am

Since I keep getting a blank scene at Phoenix Song even when I log-in-

I am very curious about Clare. Her backstory and why she see the auras would make another interesting story. When is she going to know the gender of Tonks and Harry's baby?

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 4:39pm

Loving it... would truly love to be able to read the whole thing.

KateHC posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 11:48am

Clare is charming. Her POV is written brilliantly.

Christopher Patton posted a comment on Wednesday 7th February 2007 8:07am

I'd like to see this story continued someday, it seems to have real potential.

CootiePatootie posted a comment on Tuesday 19th December 2006 8:43am

"Thinking that I might be lying on top of my sheets, wearing just a thin, oversized tee-shirt?" Ginny asked.

"Now you’re fighting dirty," Harry said.

"I’m a Weasley," Ginny said

Just perfect.

Love it, as I do all of your work.

Cheers,

Cassie

saugart posted a comment on Saturday 2nd December 2006 9:18am

Ah, this was indeed a pleasure. You wrote in the email you sent announcing this story's availability that "It's been done before", but I personally have not read as good a one.

It didn't look like an old warmed-over cliche as far as I was concerned.

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Friday 1st December 2006 12:55pm

Cute.

even Percy’s, which just moved away from Persona Non Grata."
-made me laugh

Gardengirl posted a comment on Thursday 30th November 2006 12:03pm

Awwwww... thanks!

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 30th November 2006 4:49am

Awww, that was so sweet. I agree about Ginny's reaction. Lovely drabble.