nfk posted a comment on Friday 20th February 2009 12:55am

Just saw that you added a chapter and then realized that I hadn't even read this story yet. I quickly remedied that.

I really enjoy the story coming from Hermione's perspective and the Harry/Lily angle. And I like the solution with the Death Eaters, blow 'em up first, sort everything out later!

Of course, nothing ever goes as planned. I look forward to see what happens next.

Kokopelli replied:

Of course, no detailed plan survives contact with the enemy.

After that it's all jazz - you make it up as you go along.

Patches posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 8:10pm

Wow! A lot going on. Now that Lily and Harry can come and go as they please things will be different. I'm glad Harry spoke to Ginny. It sounds like something Harry would say. I hope Harry is ok. Now everyone will be upset until they can find out where Harry is. Did Snape go up with the rest? It certainly looks like it. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. pms

Kokopelli replied:

Yes, Snape died.

jilumasam posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 2:02pm

Very interesting concept and some great writing here!

Glad to see you are committed to finishing off this story.

Liz

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for your kind words.

KateHC posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 1:52pm

You've written a tight chapter with intriguing plot development. You do Hermione's POV very well. What a cliffie-
"

" I scanned the room and then shouted, to be heard over the chaos.

"Where’s Harry?"

Kokopelli replied:

Cliffhanger?   What cliffhanger?

Carol Layland posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 1:34pm

A very nice well written story with a very nice and unique approach to the problems that Voldemort presents. I especially like lily.

DrT posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 12:54pm

I take it Harry and/or Lily are after Voldie?

Again, an interestng take one year 7

BJH posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 12:44pm

Nice chapter and a very well thought out plan of attack. I wonder what part of it didn't survive the first shot?

With Lily and Harry being able to flip back and forth, I get the feeling that history will repeat itself and Lily will flip in place to take Harry's place and be hit by an AK. Or perhaps the other way around?

BJH

Wolfric posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 11:27am

I do hope with an evil cliff hanger, you will continue your more rapid release of chapters.
Thanks for the great chapter. So when Voldemort hits Harry/Lily with an AK which one does he kill? W.

David Najarian posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 10:44am

Excellent chapter as always (or at least as always as 4 chapters can get). Excellent story delvelopment, and I love the cliffie!!

kingsavage posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 8:48am

You know, technically it would only be Horcruces if the guy who invented them called them that. He obviously got it wrong, but he invented them, so he can call them whatever he wants.

amulder posted a comment on Thursday 19th February 2009 6:39am

John, I hate cliffies. Really, I do.

It's too easy. so what next, is the question...
You're not typically bloodthirsty, so I'm curious as to how you'll proceed.

Glad to see another chapter. The whole schizo-Harry/Lily thing is sure interesting. Do we stay with status quo, lose her, or somehow transfer her into another body for a more permanent solution? Hmmm.

Kokopelli replied:

You tell me.

Patches posted a comment on Saturday 31st January 2009 11:17am

This is good. I really like this story. A really different view of the Potterverse but you are really good at doing new situations. I am sorry to see that you are not going to continue with HP stoies. You have written some really good ones. If you should change your mind I will be here to read them. Thanks for sharing your tallent. pms

Kokopelli replied:

PMS,

Thanks for your kind words.

I''m not burning any bridges, just letting people know that fan fic is no longer the season of my life.

J

Deborahsu posted a comment on Saturday 31st January 2009 1:06am

You updated!!!! Hurray!!! I thought you'd abandoned this story. But it'll be your last? I'm sorry to hear that. I've always enjoyed your work in this delightfully flexible universe.

Kokopelli replied:

No, I will finish this story - the question is whether or not it will be one or two additional chapters.   The problem is time - I work, I'm married, I have kids - after spending time on all of these activities, there's precious little left for writing.

My children, however, are only going to be under my roof for a few more years, so they're the priority for now.

After that, maybe something original that I can sell.

brad posted a comment on Friday 30th January 2009 6:21pm

I do enjoy your stories; they have a very 'practical' feel to them. It's a pragmatic flavour I've enjoyed since my fandom beginnings, when TLoS was pretty much the first fanfic I discovered.

I think I irritated you with the last one-shot you published - the one with Ginny climbing into Harry's lap and spending the night there, in full view of the common room, after the final battle. My anti-canon!Ginny bias interpreted that as 'staking a claim' to her hero for all the world to see. That might not have been her only aim, but it certainly was a useful result.

This time around Ginny's returning with a '*very* smug smile on her face' has me seeing Weasley red. I guess Ginny's obstacle-free ride to Harry's heart from HBP continued without obstruction through Lily's interrogation? Maybe it's because I'm a male, but I can't help but see a first-time chat with my romantic interest's parent as something to be nervous about. Doubly so if the parent has the reputation of Lily (a woman who sacrificed her life for her child). I note that Ginny was 'wary' (but had the charm turned on) prior to the walk. I'm with Ron; I would have loved to hear that conversation, and I am curious as to how/why dear Ginny came back so cock-a-hoop happy.

I suspect that some of your readers wouldn't have minded being in on the torture - potential or otherwise - of Snape either. :-)

It's an excellent glamour that relays such things as wind-driven red-and-white cheeks and ears of the underlying body to the superimposed image! :-)

Looking forward to the conclusion of this tale ... wondering if Lily/Harry is going to survive!

Kokopelli replied:

Ah, Now What - I enjoyed that little drabble - it was H/G because it was strict to canon - but I'm no longer feeling bound to be a canonist - so there ;-)

You must remember that this story is from Hermione's POV - she interpreted Ginny's expression as smug, but it equally could have been terrified or "I'm smiling because I don't know what else to do..."

Lily lit the torch and convinced Severus that if he didn't start talking, she was going to peel his skin, starting on his feet and working her way up.   She was very believable.

You may or may not enjoy the ending - we'll see.

Thanks for reading.

JEC

kate19 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th January 2009 7:47am

it's nice to read something different sometimes. and this is funny too! also nice to see a different point of view.

kate

Kokopelli replied:

In my NSHO, more fanfic should be written from Hermione's POV, but so few writers take advantage of it.   When writing TLOS, I experimented with writing different chapters from different POVs - and I found that I enjoyed writing Hermione very much.

J

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Sunday 25th January 2009 5:08am

Huh. I was sure that it was Pettigrew that they caught.

Good chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.

Kokopelli replied:

You're welcome.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 24th January 2009 10:45pm

Man, even with the glamour that has to be confusing for all involved. I suspect a lot of readers would love to hear the discussion between Lily and Ginny, though I suspect Harry would be horribly embarrassed to hear it and will only "enjoy" the results of it. Looking ahead, I'm wondering just what surprises Lily has in mind for that Teeter meeting. This is a uniquely different and enjoyable fic, thank you.

Kokopelli replied:

I may write that scene as an omake, or write it into one of the chapters to come.

riegert8 posted a comment on Friday 23rd January 2009 9:20pm

This is a sad story, seem that Harry has such bad live that he the only one that can't talk to his mother. What worse is that she take over his body, which make him a prisoner that alone.

Kokopelli replied:

That's not where this story is going.

millie johanson posted a comment on Friday 23rd January 2009 6:15pm

Hello,
I love your story ...
Got to go Ch 2 is up.
Until latter Miss Millie

Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 23rd January 2009 4:49pm

I enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for writing. I am somewhat discouraged in that you are the latest author that I like who has announced his intention to quit writing. I suppose that I can understand that peoples interests evolve and change but that doesn't lessen the sense of loss for the enjoyment that you have so unselfishly provided. The very best of luck and satisfaction to you in your future endeavors. Thanks again. W.

Kokopelli replied:

It's time to stop writing in JKR's sandbox and starting my own stuff - but at this season of my life, writing is a hobby that takes a back seat to family - alas.