Anthony May posted a comment on Friday 23rd January 2009 3:53pm

So you are alive!!!! As far as I can tell, you are the Shepherd of the Fan Fiction Writers. I have been wondering when we would get to hearing from you. It's been a while and it's good to have you back. As always the story is great, I had to go back and read the first 2 chapters again-but it was worth it. Please, I beg of thee, do not make us wait another year for a chapter. Always a fan, Anthony

Kokopelli replied:

Shepherd?

Tommy posted a comment on Friday 23rd January 2009 7:55am

Hey! :)

Sad to hear it might be your last HP fic. You're a brilliant writer, and I really appreciate the work you've shared with us in the HP community. I understand you might write from other fandoms, or maybe even original works, so I'll keep an eye out just in case. ;) These days the HP fandom popularity is on its way out, and the anime/manga series Naruto is quickly taking over - maybe that'll be something for you? I know Team 8 here on this site is among the most popular out there. Whether we'll see more of your work or not, a big thank you for a brilliant ride of adventures!

Sincerely,

Tommy A. L.
(Fanfix)

Kokopelli replied:

Matthew Schocke (Veridian) writes in the Naruto universe - he spent almost an hour once explaining the story to me, but I've yet to crack into that world.  

No, the next step in writing will be collaborating with other authors on original stuff, and writing some original stuff of my own - but I'm waiting for my kids - I'll write more once they're away at college - which is years away.

K

Hoss posted a comment on Friday 23rd January 2009 4:35am

I'll have to go back and reread 1-2 to get my head around this one. It's good to see you back and to know tour not dead. Thanks so much for the chapter, and looking forward to the next one. Hoss

HopelessFan posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 11:48pm

I was going to joke but I was quite saddened to see this might be the last HP story you'll finish.
You were one of the first Fanfiction authors i read and I've faithfully been following you for ages.
I know there would be a day eventually when you moved on.. i'm just sorry its come so soon.

Thanks for your contributions.. they have all been read and appreciated.

noahshonor posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 10:17pm

Never mind how long it takes, when Kokopelli writes, all is well.

The Midnight Poster posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 7:14pm

WoW, I had forgotten all about this story. Good to see you haven't forgotten. Looking forward to the next chapter 6 months from now :)

Lon Huey posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 1:34pm

Thanks for coming back.

KateHC posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 11:46am

Lovely. I read it all from the beginning again just because it had been a while. Telling the story from Hermione's Point of View allows us to get to know her better. Very well done!

Jimbocous posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 10:19am

Thanks for the update!!!

amulder posted a comment on Thursday 22nd January 2009 8:30am

Well, John, I'd about forgot this existed.

Now I have to go back and re-read the whole thing. I'm lost! :-)

Hope you're doing well,
...art

jakjakattk posted a comment on Monday 31st December 2007 12:34pm

you jave interesting story here. I await the final verdict on, if I like or love your ideas unit I can see more of your story. Keep up the great work and let me know if I could help you. You have left open a lot of new ideas that can be used. hopefully you haven't given up on this story yet. there is still so much that can be done with it..

Jack
E-mail:
jakjakattk@comcast.net

ZanyMuggle posted a comment on Monday 24th December 2007 6:50am

I hope that, unlike ff.net, a reader can leave more than one review for a chapter.

I reviewed a few minutes ago, when I had read (or re-read, I forget sometimes) only about a third of this chapter. I love what you did with the rest of the chapter.

This chapter proves that battle scenes or action-based frenzies are not required to move a good story along.

Normally, I try to end a review with thanks for the writer's effort, and not with something like "write more!" or "when's the next chapter going to be out?" So, thanks for writing. I do like your work immensely, and am grateful when a good writer delivers work for free.

HOWEVER, it's been five months... could you post a progress report in the forums? Um... wait, maybe you already have. I'd better check.

Thanks again!

Kokopelli replied:

I'm about half-way through the third chapter - I still have to use a blow-torch on Snape, you see...

ZanyMuggle posted a comment on Monday 24th December 2007 6:39am

I obviously did not give this chapter due attention when you released it in July. Nor will my commentary now do justice to the work. Nonetheless...

Very, very good. Considering how little is written in canon about Lily, your characterization is amazingingly "right". Your Harry and Hermione are spot on with my own images. Where your Remus differs from canon - i.e. caring about Harry - I prefer yours.

Lastly, you're doing well evolving the characters beyond what's known of them, extrapolating in a very natural way.

As for plot and scenes... your primary plot device (Lily's horcrux) is brilliant, and your arrangement and construction of scenes has athe polish of experienced writing.

My apologies if this review sounds a bit off. I'm feeling rather multi-syllabic today, and it appears to have colored my tone here.

Roberta Johnson posted a comment on Wednesday 17th October 2007 5:54pm

Well, this is very interesting!

The Resident posted a comment on Wednesday 5th September 2007 2:40pm

Quite interesting and enjoyable. I eagerly await the upcoming chapters.

laurie posted a comment on Wednesday 25th July 2007 2:30pm

"Everybody knows it’s one Horcrux, two Horcruces, but I’m trying really hard to not be a swot this year." (from ch. 1)

Perfect - just how I imagined Hermione! Smart people are usually very funny and you've done a perfect job of keeping her in character while developing her further and making her funny. It's rare that you see a 1st person Hermione story that is this good. I'm really enjoying her take on things!

More ... more!

brad posted a comment on Tuesday 24th July 2007 1:47pm

I've always been a bit suspicious about mechanical means of destroying horcruxes, be it through force, fire, acids, et cetera. Presumably there's a spell to set one up, so one would expect a spell would be required to destroy it as well. Or, if souls *can* be affected by the purely physical, why haven't we muggles seen/measured/weighed one by now?

On the other hand, nature - or the magical world - doesn't have to symmetrical just because that's the process which looks the tidiest, and it *does* make sense that the destruction of its physical container would leave the soul fragment in a delicate unstable state, liable to disperse by itself.

You've got me wondering what you're going to do with Lily, if anything, if she doesn't *have* to stay in Harry's body.

I'm looking forward to reading *some* comment on Harry's falling for a girl who looks a lot like his mother, please please please ... :-)

Kokopelli replied:

My thought, before reading DH, was that VMort would be very clever at making the Horcruces immune from most magical means, but wouldn't think of lasers, cutting torches, or other muggle inventions, having been cut off from the Muggle world for years.   I originally wanted to use an industrial cutting laser, but that took too much plotting.

Lon Huey posted a comment on Monday 23rd July 2007 1:23pm

I really don't think I could win an argument with Hermione, so I won't even try.

Chris1 posted a comment on Sunday 22nd July 2007 9:55pm

Interesting.

Can't wait to see how Ginny reacts to Lily *grin*

Also, you brought up Lily being distressed by seeing James' face when she looks in the mirror.

Will there be a "Ginny looks like Lily" moment?

Chris

Kokopelli replied:

The point is, contrary to Fanon, that Ginny _doesn't_ look like Lily, apart from both being female and both having somewhat red hair.   Ginny's hair color, in canon, is red, like a tomato, with a heart-shaped face, and Lily has darker hair, and a narrow face, somewhat like her sister (Petunia).

Patches posted a comment on Sunday 22nd July 2007 9:20pm

This is a good story. I look forward to the next story about Lily and Ginny. This is a great way for Harry to interact with his mum. Thanks for writing. pms